is making it difficult for me to leave
I wish I could hug you
one last time.
I wish I could hold you tight
and never let go
But I hate to wake you up
Coz' I don't wanna see you cry
And that would make me weak.
Honey, I am leaving now.
By the time you wake up,
I would be out of this town
In a far flung area
Out of your reach.
But you will always be on my mind
And in my heart.
I wouldn't have been able to see your tears
And so I am leaving
Without telling you.
I hope that you would wait for me
Until I return with a wedding ring.
If only I could say sorry,
for the times I betrayed you
for the times I didn't love you
But don't worry my baby
I will return
and take you with me
and we would be together again.
This post has been inspired by John Denver's 'Leaving On A Jet Plane'. Today, while taking a morning walk, I was listening to this song. And instantly I knew that I would write something similar to this. I ain't good like him but yeah, it did inspire me to write.
Ciao
great going gal..!!
ReplyDeleteUr magic is working in poetries as well..
Keep writing good stuffs.
and do write some positive stuffs...too.
Explore your skills in writing some goody-goody stuffs (not like suraj badjatya 's movie thou)... And not jus betrayal..!!
@ease: this was positive. Not just betrayal. The protagonist will return even after betraying. It will have a happy ending (provided the girl waits for him)
ReplyDeleteLovely poem ! and could be interpreted in many ways..an unwedded mother leaving her child to take back legitimately after wedding...I took it that way and felt happy:)
ReplyDeleteYou really did a fab job girl! keep it up...
ReplyDeleteCheers!!!
thanks Renu. it just depends on the perception. Could be anything. Even the gender can b reversed.
ReplyDelete@ Rashmi: Thanks deary. :)
there r lot many things to mention.... but the best part is.."YOU AND MORNING WALK..." :P
ReplyDeleteossum....
keep up da gud work...
My question exactly! How do people find time to go for morning walks? I'm amazed.
ReplyDeleteNice poem.
hahaha... wen a girl is fat and she has attained a marriageable age then her parents compell her to atleast walk in the mornings.. Trust me I hate it... :(
ReplyDeleten yaa... glad that you guys liked my post... :)
i found it similar to john denver's,especially the "wedding ring" part..then only i saw your foot note...
ReplyDeletegood attempt..:)
oh yeah.. absolutely... i thot of skipping that wedding ring part but I felt that it made the post complete. cheers to the song that it stirred the emotions in me..
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